spnanonhaven

Fic - In A Different Light by deanawinchester

http://spn-reversebang.livejournal.com/79845.html

word count - 5,491

Summary: When Detective Dean Winchester first meets his assigned Guardian, sparks fly. The Cyberangel named Castiel is the most infuriating being Dean has ever had the misfortune to meet. He doesn't have a sense of sarcasm or humor, but he makes up for it with staring. A lot. Of course, this still doesn't hold Dean back from falling for Castiel, teaching the half-human, half-cybernetic being about the importance of feelings in the process.

You know how sometimes you can tell a lot about a fic from the very first sentence? Here's the opening of this fic (highlights mine):

After two days without getting any sleep Detective Dean Winchester was ready to fall asleep while standing, so despite the huge pile of files on his desk, he decided to take a night off, go home, and sleep.

Maybe the author was very sleepy when they wrote that sentence? (The exposition was so dull, though. My eyes glazed over a bit.)

I don't think their writing is bad, though. Just unpolished, and they need to figure out how to viciously cull their stuff down. Give it more time and practice, they could turn out pretty good.