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Big Bang/Exchange Fic Discussion #1
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SUBJECT: Title [Pairing, Rating] by AUTHOR
CONTENT: Art by whoever

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REVERSE BB: Art by artistic_sillie - "Awakened with a Kiss" by fvnesscafe [J2 – NC17]

(Anonymous)
Link to fic : http://fvnesscafe.livejournal.com/16584.html

Link to art : http://artistic-sillie.livejournal.com/278621.html
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Re: REVERSE BB: Art by artistic_sillie - "Awakened with a Kiss" by fvnesscafe [J2 – NC17]

(Anonymous)
Tried to get through this but I just couldn't. It's only 7k but I still couldn't do it. The style is very...stilted. There's a lot of places very the writing is just so mechanical with very little flow that it just feels cold. Some grammar issues, too. Also, I couldn't take all the frequent breaks as the fic switched between POVs. Just pick one and STICK with it, for crying out loud.

Jensen's very tired one night and Jared ends up kissing him. Jensen has a small crisis and I'm guessing that there's porn at the end.

Not really a big fan of the artwork, either.
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Re: REVERSE BB: Art by artistic_sillie - "Awakened with a Kiss" by fvnesscafe [J2 – NC17]

(Anonymous)
I really love the artwork.

The story summary sounds interesting. I probably would have read it if it weren't deleted.
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Re: REVERSE BB: Art by artistic_sillie - "Awakened with a Kiss" by fvnesscafe [J2 – NC17]

(Anonymous)
The story is now back up.
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Re: REVERSE BB: Art by artistic_sillie - "Awakened with a Kiss" by fvnesscafe [J2 – NC17]

(Anonymous)
It would be overstating the case to call this badfic, but it has badfic tendencies: Jared has almond shaped orbs, "the younger man" and "the older man" used repeatedly, random tense changes between paragraphs throughout. Jensen is OoC, too. I'm not sure how to describe it, he's like a woobie, but without an angsty traumatic background. More like shy frail damsel-ish, I guess? Jensen stumbles while walking up his porch steps:

Jared would do himself bodily harm before ever letting anything happen to Jensen. Instinctively, he reached a strong arm out to catch him around the waist and pulled him close against his tall body for stability.

Jensen’s sudden fear of hitting the porch head first was replaced with gratitude after he realized he was safe and standing on this own two feet. His heart pounding much faster than before, he looked back and up at Jared with soft, sleepy eyes and a sheepish smile. His face openly showing how much he appreciated his friend and what he did for him.


Anyway, the plot is that a sleepy Jensen kisses Jared and then gets insomnia fretting about it.

IDK, there was just a young innocent air to the whole thing that didn't fit well with my mental concept of the Js as adult men. The sex scene at the end was unexpectedly porny in description, but maintained that rather innocent POV. It's sweet, and I can enjoy that about it, but you really have to be in certain mood to read it.
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